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Name
Thesis/Topic
sentence
Fluency
Details
Other
Student 1
Has a thesis
-Has a thesis
Has paragraphs.
Needs help with
comma usage
-Has a lot of
summarization/repe
at information
without going
deeper into analysis
Student 2
Has a topic
sentence /sort of
thesis
-States his position
on technology in the
first paragraph but
has no real thesis
Reads easily
-Good transitions
Student 3
Has a topic
sentence
-Has a thesis but
doesnt list what he
will discuss in his
body paragraphs
-Each body
paragraph has a
topic sentence
Doesnt
capitalize
is.
-Again
doesnt
capitalize
is
Student 4
No thesis
-Has a thesis with 3
reasons but each are
in a different
paragraph
-Has a conclusion
-To versus
too
Student 5
Has a thesis
-Has a thesis
Reads easily
-Each paragraph
has a topic
sentence and the
Has good
details
-Great
details
Doesnt
capitalize
his is
-Struggles
with verb
tense (it
help us
instead of
it helps
us
-Good
details
paragraph stays on
the topic stated in
the topic sentence
Student 6
-three reasons in
three different
paragraphs
-struggles with
spelling
-Thier
-to versus
too
Student 7
Has a thesis
-Good intro
paragraph
-No thesis
-Conclusion
introduces new ideas
Has paragraphs.
Needs help with
punctuation
(especially comma
usage).
-First body
paragraph has no
real main reason
behind it
-Easy to read
Has good
reasons
why the
wish would
be good
and bad for
himself/
society
-No real
argument
developed
-knoledg
e
-impossia
ble
-Doesnt
capitalize
proper
nouns
Student 8
Good introductory
sentence. Has a
thesis
-No thesis
Proper use of
punctuation in all
forms. Reads easily
-Good
details but
sparse;
needs more
evidence
-Kind of
flippyfloppy on
the issue
(doesnt
fully take
on one
stance)
Student 9
No thesis
-Great hook
-Thesis states her
belief but doesnt list
the things she will
discuss in the
following paragraphs
-Good conclusion
Lots of careless
mistakes. Lots of
misspelled words.
-Good
details
Doesnt
capitalize
-A little
too
informa
-Still
struggles
with
capitalizat
ion
Student 10
Has a thesis
Lots of
-Good
Uses
abbreviations/slang
-Easy to read
-Three reasons in
three paragraphs
details
are
instead of
our
-&
instead of
and
Student 11
Have a topic
sentence and thesis
-Has a good intro but
no real thesis
-Has topic sentences
for each paragraph
Choppy sentences
-Three reasons in
three paragraphs
-Some weird/
miswordings
-Conclusion
introduces new
information
-Good
details
-Used I
-Spelling
errors
Student 12
No thesis
-States his position
but not really in a
thesis form (not in list
form)
-has a conclusion
smashed in the last
paragraph
Run-on sentences
-One large body
paragraph
-Hard to read
-Poor organization
Has good
details for
the one
wish he
recorded
-has good
reasons but
poorly
developed/
introduced
-Last
paragraph
has great
detail and
easy to
follow
Scrappily
put
together.
Doesnt
capitalize
is
-Forgets
periods
Student 13
It is clear English is
the second
language.
-Understandable
but not standard
English
-Good
details but
needs a lot
more
analysis
Struggles
to use the
proper
tense (a
consistent
tense).
Student 14
-Choppy sentences
-Only two body
paragraphs
-Details are
scattered
and dont
connect
well (within
-Doesnt
capitalize
first
sentence
paragraphs)
-good
reasons
Student 15
Lots of run on
sentences
-Has transitions
-Good
details but
could
expand on
analysis
Often
incorrect
use of
there,
their,
theyre
Student 16
No thesis
-Has a thesis
-Has topic sentences
for each paragraph
-Good conclusion
Has good
supporting
details
-Good
details
Has a lot
of
grammati
cal errors.
Hard to
read
Student 17
Has a introductory/
topic sentence
-Has a thesis but not
in list form
-Good hook
-Good conclusion
-Very
detailed
-Great
reasons
and
explanation
Doesnt
capitalize
Capitalize
s random
words
Student 18
Hard-to-read at
parts, not formal
English
-Hard to read
because of the
difficulty in
translating spanish
to English
-Good
details
Correct
punctuatio
n of
quotations
Student 19
No thesis
-Great starter
sentence/hook
-No thesis
-Struggles with verb
tense
Grammar errors
(then instead of
than, space
between my and
self)- otherwise
reads pretty easily
-Grammatical errors
Has good
details
Good
details and
reasons
why
technology
Uses
periods
instead of
question
marks in a
lot of
places
make it a little
difficult to read
is positive
Student 20
Could use
paragraphs. Has
careless spelling
errors
-Great diction
-Good conclusion
-Great
details
-Great
transitions
-Uses
periods
instead of
questions
marks in
certain
sentences
Student 22
Has a thesis
-Has a thesis in sort
of a list style
Uses repetitive
language
-Paragraphs are a
spattering of
different ideas; hard
to follow
-Not one idea per
paragraph
-Only two body
paragraphs
Doesnt
capitalize
his is.