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Alexandra King
English 250 SD
Assign. #5 W-Piece Reflection
S. Futhey
12/11/15
Reflection on W-Piece Revision
For my revised written-piece I chose to do my second assignment. I made many changes
and improvements, so it is now a better piece of textual analysis over an article in our
Everythings an Argument book. In order to make progress, I looked at it and fixed it parts at a
time after short breaks in order to look from a fresh viewpoint. Throughout the assignment, I
made progress on it that I now feel it is a better piece that fulfills the requirements of that essay.
Some of the changes I made were adding detail and more description to increase the
explanation on my point of the critique of the author and his article. Additionally, I changed
some of the sentences word structure and layout in order to be more clear to get to the point I
was trying to make, such as changing to make it have character in order to be more specific to
make this article have character. I also fixed spelling and grammar errors as needed in order to
use my English composition communication skills properly. These changes were important
because they specify what I want the audience to know about the authors article and about my
analysis of it as well as making my writing sharper in order to communicate the message I want
to convey.
I chose to delete certain words or phrases because they did not make sense like I
originally thought they did. These deletions I made benefitted the movement of the sentence and
overall paragraph it was in, so it would make more sense in order to get across what I wanted to
say. For example, I changed the sentence of the visuals/ pictures contribute to his argument by
further explaining to get his point across about healthy eating and comparisons of costs for a
family of four of grocery versus fast food bought into the visuals contribute to his argument by

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further explaining his point about healthy eating and comparing groceries versus fast food for a
family of four that is bought, such as.. to be more specific in my explanation from my paper.
Some parts I decided to make no changes were parts throughout the paper I felt were
suitable for what I wanted to say and helped bring more context for the places I adjusted because
the parts without change were well off the way they were. For example, I kept all the cited
samples like when I said the author mentions trends in the food industry and why junk food
may seem cheaper, but in reality, especially for families, is not the better option.
In order to reorganize components of the assignment, I also moved some of my sentences
around, so the paragraph would flow better through the paper. I made these changes because
there were parts that made more sense being reorganized. The benefit of reorganizing elements
of the piece is to strengthen the writing in order for the audience to better relate and understand
the theme of that particular part of the paper. By strengthening the writing through reorganizing
elements of the piece it makes more sense and flows better the writer and audience can better
connect.
Overall, my revision of my second assignment fulfills the requirements much better and
through editing, even, added some length to the paper. I feel it is now more cohesive and less
rushed from taking it a part at a time and fixing it after looking at it multiple times in order to
come back and see how it sounds. I had peers and family look it over in order to get outside
opinions of what needs to be adjusted, which helped quite a bit. I deleted some words or phrases
and kept others. I also reorganized within certain paragraphs to be more clear and consistent in
my message to my audience. In addition, I added other words or phrases in my revised
assignment to make up for the deleted areas or where areas needed more explanation and detail. I

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now feel more confident in that assignment and how it explains my textual analysis of Mark
Bittmans article.