Laia Ravents Roig

October 6, 2015
TALK BACK Assignment
1. Write a paragraph or two that summarize(s) your overall reaction to
your peers comments in light of how you felt your original essay met
the goals of the assignment. Was your primary reaction surprise?
Agreement? Something else? Explain.
I was scared to show my draft to my classmates. We dont know
much about each other so I over though a little bit about what
they would say and think. We didnt write comments but we talk
about each draft. He recommended me to change few things
and revise a paragraph. My draft was very different from his
one. I wrote and describe more specific moments that
influenced me in my literacy and he wrote more general stages
in his life. I thought that taking ideas from his draft could
improve and amplify mine.
2. Write a paragraph or two that summarize(s) your overall reaction to
my (your teachers) comments in light of how you felt your original
essay met the goals of the assignment. Was your primary reaction
surprise? Agreement? Something else? Explain.
Not comments received.
3. Next, for each major revision suggestion, please restate them (in
your own words) and briefly explain either how you plan to
incorporate the suggestions into your revised draft or why you feel a
certain suggestion would not serve to improve your essay. You are
also encouraged to note which suggestions you found most/least clear
and helpful. Please note that resisting revision suggestions is perfectly
acceptable as long as you can provide a logical rationale behind your

decision. For example, if you feel a certain decision you madeas is

effectively fulfills the goals of the assignment and serves your
intended audience/purpose, make sure you explain why. You might
discuss your plans or anything that would hinder you from making
these revisions.
We exchanged our drafts but we talked to each other and gave
suggestions verbally. My draft was a little bit disordered, my
classmate gave me some comments to link all those specific
moments that I had and make it more understandable. It was the
most clear and helpful suggestion. Also, adding a particular tone.
Everyone has its writing style so I think that you cant suggest to
change it unless it is harmful or inappropriate. There are different
points of view depending on the person.

4. Finally (optional), note any other revision strategies, beyond your

peers or my suggestions, that you plan on incorporating in your
essay. (For example, perhaps after reading over your draft, you want
to experiment with a particular tone/style that you feel will better
meet the needs of your audience.)
After exchanging our drafts with my classmates I incorporated
many things that my classmates gave me. I thought that they
were right in their comments. I should use a particular tone that
my classmate advised me, I think it could make my narrative
more interesting.