Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: ___________Raymond Yongho________________

Reviewers name: _____________Jacob Cole______________
Author: Provide the following information about your essay:
1. Write your thesis statement/main idea below (if it is still a work in progress, say so)

The general theme of my reflection memo was to not being afraid of ones failures

2. Write out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer.

Do the genres that I have listed down relate to my theme?

Would it have made more sense for me to have added my theme in the introductory paragraph?

Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay.
Technical Communication could not be any further from any other communications course; in fact it is
more based off of a flipped course which focuses heavily on student interaction and having the
students research certain topics that they will later be discussing in class.
-The only overarching theme in the introduction is that tech com takes a lot of revision work
-I would let the reader know what the rest of the paper is going to be about

2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.
-Your first body paragraph does a good job at connecting to your theme about the revision work that
goes into tech com.
-Try to tie your second body paragraph into the theme of revision more

3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
1. Into-sets the paper up but doesnt clearly state what the rest of your paper will be about
2.Your second paragraph is great and ties in really well with the theme of your paper
3. You talk about feedback in the first few sentences but I would elaborate more
4. Same as the last, you briefly touch on your theme but it doesnt go into much depth
5. Not much to say about the conclusion. Great job. I really like the Cosby quote

4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.
-Tying the whole paper to your theme
-Maybe make the fourth paragraph a little longer

5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.

I would make it more clear on what your trying to make as the main theme to your memo

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.

2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?

3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.
1. Make the main theme of my final memo more clear
2. Once that is done make sure to present it in the introductory paragraph
3. Make sure to section the paragraphs