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Final Reflection
English 2010 Objectives:
At the completion of English 2010, students should be able to:
1.

Write in multiple genres.

2.

Appropriately adapt strategies of argumentation for a given writing situation.

3.

Appropriately adapt style and design for a given writing situation.

4.

Approach reading and research critically and rhetorically, choosing

appropriate research strategies for a particular writing task.

5.

Conceive, draft, and revise many kinds of documents, and manage these

processes independently.
6.

Cite sources appropriately for the writing situation, including using an

academic system of citation with a high degree of proficiency.

7.

Understand and respond critically to a civic conversation and become a

legitimate participant in that conversation.

8.

Work collaboratively on writing tasks with other writers.

9.

Edit their writing so that it contains a minimum of surface error.

My Work:
My issue of concern was the effects of mass media on men, women and children.
When gathering with my group, we came to an agreement that the most similar age group
would be adolescents. I chose mass media because we are in a world surrounded by
media that can greatly impact any person and how they perceive themselves, based on

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what mass media stipulates as beautiful or handsome. Most people, including myself,
have been impacted by something they have seen on television, in the movies, magazines,
or elsewhere.
I wanted to bring awareness to the changes made over time to answer the question
for Why is our society like this? This is something that was so easy to put our society
into, but now we have to take our society out of, which Im glad to see other countries
making an effort. In America, there seems to be some form of effort, but I feel that the
small efforts arent succeeding, so the better ways are to raise awareness.
I appreciated peer reviews, because they helped me write my essays better. I
didnt realize that I could find more potential in my writing to expand on my topic. This
helped support my issue of concern. This also helped me see if I made any other mistakes
that I have missed. Its always better to have someone else look at your work before
officially publishing it, because it will sound professional and smooth the rough edges. I
used them to change around my essays and make them sound much better and sell the
topic.
At first when I started writing about my topic, my writing sounded more like an
essay, rather than passionate. I also wrote with too many questions, but didnt answer
them. With peer reviews, I was able to change that into more passionate essays that
included more support, such as statistics, and I left out most of my unanswered questions.
I had my ePortfolio put together a while ago. I like to keep my website clean and
easy to read. I have put a lot of time in to my ePortfolio and I put my best pieces in it to
keep the clean work and hours upon hours I have spent valued. I was proud of my
PowerPoint presentation, and I have included my Position piece, titled What are we

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exposing our teenagers to? I have also included my final presentation shortly before my
Position essay to show the changes I have made between essays.
When I was reviewed by my fellow peer reviewers, I found the most helpful to be
to add statistics and remove most of my questions if they could not be answered. I did
notice very few of my peers, though, did not use the suggestions given to make their
papers better. However, the purpose of peer reviews is to make your paper better, so I
would recommend more open-minded views, and dynamics. Another thing I would
include for recommendations would be to try different ways to write your paper.
Sometimes writing it in essay form can get boring. If you dont have to write it in essay
form, and you are invited to be creative, be creative.
As a peer reviewer, I felt that reading grammar helped a little bit, and some
concept ideas. It has helped me learn to check my grammar, spelling and flow of my
paper. It has helped me support my statements with hard facts rather than opinionated
statements, and it has answered all questions. I have also learned to change my dynamics
and flexibility a lot more by seeing what others have done. They were able to show me
ideas that could advance my knowledge past what I already know.

Citations To My Documents:
Mass Media: Influences On Children and Teens:
I have mostly made changes to wording and grammar in this document. On Page
1, I have made better wording by cutting out words or changing words. On Page 2, I cut
out words to sound more professional, rather than stating, while writing this essay. On
Page 3, I corrected a grammar error. On page 4, I simplified sentences. On Page 5, I have

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also simplified a couple of sentences. On Page 8, I added citations for my pictures that I
used for my essay.
All reviews and changes added were between peer reviews and the present day.

What are we exposing our teenagers to?

On Page 1, I simplified my opening sentence and changed some of my wording in
my first paragraph. I added a new transition to the next paragraph because I did not have
the opposing side added. I added the opposing side for the next two paragraphs, which
carries over to Page 2. On Page 3, I corrected a grammar error, and added a different
perspective on Marilyn Monroe. This continues into Page 3. On Page 3, I corrected
another grammar error. I also added a better perspective on Twiggy. On Page 4, I
changed the beginning of my second paragraph, and transitioned the end of it better for
the next paragraph.
On Page 5, I followed the suggested grammar changes from my peer reviews. On
Page 7, I added an additional section to support more information about men and boys.
On Page 8, I made another grammar correction. On Page 9, I added new citations,
including pictures.
All reviews and changes added were between peer reviews and the present day.