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How: In my rhetorical analysis, I did not summarize any authorities theories and
their backgrounds. Therefore, the readers are very likely to misunderstand what I
want to claim and what my perspective is about. Furthermore, throughout the essay, I
am explaining my photos rather than using my photos as evidence, incorporating
them to my persuasive essay, aiming to demonstrate the authorities theories.
Solution: I have added some background information about the discussion of
space, place, and the self between these authorities. Moreover, I claim that I believe
that space will transform into a place as it acquires meanings, with demonstration
based on my visual memoir.
In the future: I will think from my readers perspective: can they understand what
I am talking about? If not, how can I improve what I have written?
HOC: Tone
How: As what Dr. Holt said, my perspective is telling the story that Emory
changes my view towards choosing a major; however, this is more like the theme of
my visual memoir rather than the theme of my persuasive essay. My essays main
function is to demonstrate the authorities theories with my memoir, my personal
story.
Solution: I cut off those examples of how my personal experiences resembling
those authorities experiences. Instead, I make a claim that space can transform into a
place as it acquires meanings at the very beginning. And I use my memoir to prove
what I have claimed is valid.
LOC: Awkwardness, Transitions, and Perspective
How: As this semester quickly passing, I start to forget using They Say I Say as a
guidebook to write fluent essay with little grammar errors.
Solution: I reread the book and found several good ways to bring up an
authoritys view, to claim what I believe in, and to make good transitions.
In the future: I will read more and think more instead of rushing to writing as soon
as I get the assignment.