Introductions {Begin with a startling fact Inearly died one Saturday afternoon. I remember that it was very hot that day. I had asked Tom and Jerry to go swimming with me at the Delta Swimming Complex. Describe the setting or use some images The water looked so cool and inviting at the deep end of the pool. The blue shimmering surface reflected the cloudless, hot Saturday afternoon. Tom, Jerry and I were sitting by the poolside in our swimming trunks. Tom had invited me over to have a swim. I was not a strong swimmer but ] agreed because I wanted a cool place to spend the day. Ablue pool, a hot day, and three sweaty boys in swimming trunks by a huge swimming pool. I can still remember vividly these images and the lesson I learnt that Saturday afternoon. Tom, Jerry and I were at Tom's condominium. We had planned to go for a swim to beat the heat. Begin with a sound as Wheet! Wheet! The lifeguard’s whistle echoed across the swimming pool. We paid no attention to him because he had been whistling non-stop since we got there. Tom, Jerry and I had chosen to spend our Saturday afternoon at the Delta Swimming Complex. Begin with dialogue or _a quotation by a “well-known” person. * So, what do you think?” Tom said. “Wow!” replied Jerry. “This is a really big pool. It must be very deep”. We were standing next to a huge swimming pool in Tom’s neighbourhood. Tom had invited Jerry and Lim over for a swim since the weather had been very hot that whole week. My grandmother always told me to beware of the water because a fortune teller told her that water would be a source of danger to my life one day. Of course, I never believed her until one fateful afternoon. Start with a question = Have you ever done anything stupid in your life? I mean, something so stupid that it almost cost your life. Well, I did last Saturday afternoon. I was with Tom and Jerry...What a day this has been! I am so glad to be home although when I got up this morning, I just could not wait to leave home. I had agreed to go over to Tom's place for a swim, and I could hardly wait to get there. It was the usual hot and humid Saturday afternoon when I made my way to the swimming pool in Toa Payoh. Every time I hear the song “Splish Splash”, I am reminded of the time I made a fool of myself at the local swimming pool. Make sure that + The first line relates to your story and leads into the action. Conclusions End with some advice Well, learnt my lesson. The next time you go swimming, do think twice before showing off. I don’t think you want to end up at the bottom of the pool Tike I almost did! End with a quotation from someone As my mother always told me, “ Pride goes before a fall”. Tom would certainly not let his boastful habit get the better of him after this incident. ‘Tom's grandmother's words came back to him as he sat, exhausted, at the ‘edge of the pool. “Remember, always respect the water”, she had told him over and over again. He now realised that no matter how good a swimmer he was, there was always the danger of drowning, One has to respect the water, and not to underestimate its hidden dangers, He would remember this lesson and his grandmother's advice for a long time to come. [End with a feeling] As Isat there, choking and gasping, [had an overwhelming sense of shame and embarrassment. I was ashamed of the fact that I lied and was boastful, and was embarrassed at the commotion I caused around the pool. Right then, Iswore never to go near the deep end of a pool again until I had learnt to swim well. [End with a questio Tom told the lifeguard that he was sorry for being so foolish. He then apologised to his friends for causing them so much trouble. 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