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To the Edito(s): Please write vour name in the table. Please consider what kind of Hback you would like to receive and try to offer the same quality of feedback to your classmates. Read the work slowly, putting checks by the more effective parts of it and putting question mar-ks by the parts that are unclear to you. Highlight or circle any spelling, capitalization, or other mechanical problems.

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General Reaction Read your classmate's piece quickly to understand its ideas. Write a few sentences addressing your first impressions about it. Is it well organized? ttas it fulfrlled the assignment of defiiing a word or tennZlri Was the essay entertaining?llf not, what needs to be done to

V What is the main poinf? In other words: how is the wsrd/term being defined through the author's perspective? What is the dominart impression? What stands out the most about this word/concept? Check that the sentenses in each paragraph stick to a main idea, that they aren't scattered all over. Each piece of evidEnce should support the thesis. Please indicate ifthere
Has what the audience already knows, or thinks they know, about the word/term been considered and addressed? Have popular misconceptions been done away with? Did you see the word/phrase in a new li Has the author included fanticotur experiences/examples that he$ed you understand the topic?

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Which parts of the paper detract from the purpose? What is unnecessary? Make sure the writing is concise and
to the point Take out any words, phrase, or ideas that are repeated unnecessarily, which sound flowery, or which "pad" rather than add to the definition. Has the writer composed a strong intro. with a creative attention grabber that makes the reader want to read more? Is the conclusion strong? Does it restate the thesis? Has the author used appropriate elements to expand the definition? For instance: personification, analogies, word Suggestions: Offer the writer at least two specific suggestions that might help him improve the essay. Think of questions you had while readiug: did it make sense? Were you able to follow along? These may be questions that your classmate will want to answer in the next draft. Please do not write, "It was good," or somettring like that. Please offer suggestions for improvement. What compliment can you qive this writer?

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