Giselle Tucker Atticus October 15, 2012 Should California allow the Death Penalty?

Short introduction: California should not vote to keep the death penalty. The death penalty has affected 1-2 sentences to California negatively and has changed grab readers California socially and financially. If attention & California does vote yes on the Death introduce title. Penalty, the state might fall and crash permanently.

Thesis: State your opinion with 3 clear reasons.

The Death Penalty takes money that should go to more useful things, kills innocent people, and demonstrates cruel and unusual punishment.

Body Paragraph #1 Topic sentence: State the first reason that supports your thesis. Money that should clearly be used for more efficient and useful things are used to kill other human beings.

Concrete Detail/Evidence: Support topic sentence with a fact, statistic, quote, percentage & cite where that

Over 300,000 dollars is used on one person when being killed in California.

information. Warrant: This is your explanation of why or how the evidence/data supports your claim. (Similar to commentary in an informational essay.) Typically 1-3 sentences in length. Counterargument: State a logical counterclaim. Use language to show this is a conflicting viewpoint (i.e. although, even though, despite, however, in contrast, etc.) Concrete Detail/Evidence: This fact, research, statistic, etc. should refute or prove your counter argument incorrect or weak. Warrant: This is your explanation of why or how the evidence/data refutes or disproves the stated counterclaim. Typically 1-3 sentences in length. Conclusion statement 300,000 dollars can really make a difference in Californian communities and can help out with economic problems and create solutions for many community problems.

Some people would argue that if California is spending the money to keep criminals hostage and to protect people and their children then who cares where it is going?

Most people think that if a criminal is in jail then there is not a question of danger and it is not a problem.

Most people would prefer that the money go to things such as building schools and enforcing education, as well as helping with businesses and other things pertaining to everyday life that should be fixed or guided. The amount of money wasted on the Death Penalty is upsetting to many people who work hard for their money

everyday.

Body Paragraph #2 Topic sentence: State the second reason that supports your thesis. Another main problem in the Death penalty system is the number of people who have been later found innocent after being killed.

Concrete Detail/Evidence:

1 out of 9 people who are killed by the death penalty Support topic sentence with a fact, statistic, quote, percentage & have later been proven innocent. cite where that information. Warrant: This is your explanation of why or how the evidence/data supports your claim. (Similar to commentary in an informational essay.) Typically 1-3 sentences in length. Even though the death penalty was made to end lives of criminals, it was not made it end the lives of the innocent. Innocent people deserve to have a second chance. Some people say that the death penalty is not to blame for this and that the problem is the jurys and judges fault.

Counterargument: State a logical counterclaim. Use language to show this is a conflicting viewpoint (i.e. although, even though, despite, however, in contrast, etc.)

Concrete Detail/Evidence: This fact, research, statistic, etc. should refute or prove your counter argument incorrect or weak. Warrant: This is your explanation of why or how the evidence/data refutes or disproves the stated counterclaim. Typically 1-3 sentences in length. Conclusion statement

Even though the jury did sentence the death, the Death Penalty is actually doing the killing.

If the death penalty did not exist then the innocent people would still be in jail and would allowed to have their life back. Innocent people who are charged should have a chance to start again in life.

Body Paragraph #3 Topic sentence: State the third reason that supports your thesis. The death penalty also shows cruel and unusual punishment, which is not allowed (according to the eighth amendment). In the United States, people are killed by the electric chair, or nowadays, people are being injected with a poison in their arm. This is done to supposedly make their death less painful. It has taken years to accomplish an almost painless way to end lives and it still hasnt been

Concrete Detail/Evidence: Support topic sentence with a fact, statistic, quote, percentage & cite where that information. Warrant: This is your explanation of why or how the evidence/data supports your claim. (Similar to commentary in an

informational essay.) Typically 1-3 sentences in length. Counterargument: State a logical counterclaim. Use language to show this is a conflicting viewpoint (i.e. although, even though, despite, however, in contrast, etc.) Concrete Detail/Evidence: This fact, research, statistic, etc. should refute or prove your counter argument incorrect or weak. Warrant: This is your explanation of why or how the evidence/data refutes or disproves the stated counterclaim. Typically 1-3 sentences in length. Conclusion statement

proven to be completely painless.

Others say that the injection is completely painless and that it is not felt by the criminal until the poison has reached the heart of the victim.

The counterargument is contradicting itself when it says that it is painless but not until it reaches the heart. This therefore means it cause pain. Even if the injection doesnt hurt it is still killing another human being which is considered cruel and unusual punishment. This can give the wrong idea to children and young adults. The death penalty, as a whole, is cruel and unusual and should not be allowed in the state of California.

Conclusion Paragraph Restate your People are being killed on Californias

position/thesis in different words. So what? Why is this issue important?

watch. California should not be allowed to kill any human being. Taking away someones life isnt allowed by the criminals so why should the professionals be able to kill a human being. The death penalty is hypocritical and teaches people to be violent and to do to people what they have done to someone else.