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The Black God's War: A Novella Introducing a New Epic Fantasy
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- Moses Siregar III
- Pubblicato:
- Aug 11, 2010
- ISBN:
- 9781458041395
- Formato:
- Libro
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"I enjoyed this novella from its opening chapter to its gripping end ... The writing style ... immediately put me at ease in the setting."
--Red Adept Reviews, 5 Stars
"Siregar's prose is smooth, and for his first novella he has his sense of pacing nailed down ... Siregar's debut is an excellent example of the quality the indie author scene is capable of ... More like this, please."
--Signal dot Noise blog
"If you want to read a talented new author with a flair for storytelling, you should definitely pick up this story."
--Debra L. Martin's Review, Two Ends of the Pen Blog
"'The Black God's War' has all the right ingredients and his prose lives up to the challenge ... It's been a while since a novella so captured me that I read it almost straight through--70 pages in the first sitting. But Siregar's novella, 15 chapters culled from 85 of his upcoming novel, just has that effect on you ... His characters are as passionate as his descriptive prose. The pacing is perfect ... This is a novella epic fantasy fans don't want to miss."
--Bryan Thomas Schmidt's blog
_______
Her father-king wants war.
Her messianic brother wants peace.
The black god wants his due.
She suffers all the consequences.
King Vieri’s war against the lands of Pawelon rages into its tenth year, and with the kingdom’s holy savior, his son Caio, en route to the fighting in the storied canyon, victory ought to come soon. Feeling abandoned by his god, King Vieri forces young Caio to lead his army to victory.
The Black One, Lord Danato, tortures Lucia with nightly visions promising another ten years of bloodshed. She can no longer tell the difference between the waking world and Danato's nightmares. Lucia knows the black god too well; he entered her bed and dreams when she was ten.
As the epic battles rage, Lucia struggles to understand the messages of The Black One, while Caio wrestles with his conscience: Can someone who only wants to heal the world bring himself to kill another man?
_______
"An inventive tale with high command of craft."
--Scott Nicholson, Author of Drummer Boy
A 27,000 word novella introducing a new epic fantasy novel by the same title, available now.
Informazioni sul libro
The Black God's War: A Novella Introducing a New Epic Fantasy
Descrizione
"I enjoyed this novella from its opening chapter to its gripping end ... The writing style ... immediately put me at ease in the setting."
--Red Adept Reviews, 5 Stars
"Siregar's prose is smooth, and for his first novella he has his sense of pacing nailed down ... Siregar's debut is an excellent example of the quality the indie author scene is capable of ... More like this, please."
--Signal dot Noise blog
"If you want to read a talented new author with a flair for storytelling, you should definitely pick up this story."
--Debra L. Martin's Review, Two Ends of the Pen Blog
"'The Black God's War' has all the right ingredients and his prose lives up to the challenge ... It's been a while since a novella so captured me that I read it almost straight through--70 pages in the first sitting. But Siregar's novella, 15 chapters culled from 85 of his upcoming novel, just has that effect on you ... His characters are as passionate as his descriptive prose. The pacing is perfect ... This is a novella epic fantasy fans don't want to miss."
--Bryan Thomas Schmidt's blog
_______
Her father-king wants war.
Her messianic brother wants peace.
The black god wants his due.
She suffers all the consequences.
King Vieri’s war against the lands of Pawelon rages into its tenth year, and with the kingdom’s holy savior, his son Caio, en route to the fighting in the storied canyon, victory ought to come soon. Feeling abandoned by his god, King Vieri forces young Caio to lead his army to victory.
The Black One, Lord Danato, tortures Lucia with nightly visions promising another ten years of bloodshed. She can no longer tell the difference between the waking world and Danato's nightmares. Lucia knows the black god too well; he entered her bed and dreams when she was ten.
As the epic battles rage, Lucia struggles to understand the messages of The Black One, while Caio wrestles with his conscience: Can someone who only wants to heal the world bring himself to kill another man?
_______
"An inventive tale with high command of craft."
--Scott Nicholson, Author of Drummer Boy
A 27,000 word novella introducing a new epic fantasy novel by the same title, available now.
- Editore:
- Moses Siregar III
- Pubblicato:
- Aug 11, 2010
- ISBN:
- 9781458041395
- Formato:
- Libro
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The Black God's War - Moses Siregar III
THE BLACK GOD’S WAR:
A Novella Introducing
A New Epic Fantasy
Moses Siregar III
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Table of Contents
Chapter One: Sing Muse, of Hades and Light
Chapter Two: The Ten
Chapter Three: A Sacrifice for Apollo
Chapter Four: The Remonstrations of Achilles
Chapter Five: The Furies
Chapter Six: Cranes in a Stormy Sky, Obscured by Dust
Chapter Seven: To Dream of Battle
Chapter Eight: The Wrath of Athena
Chapter Nine: A Burial Truce Offering
Chapter Ten: The Unseen One in Prophecy
Chapter Eleven: The Lovers’ Respite
Chapter Twelve: The Earth Shaker and His Sea
Chapter Thirteen: Astrapios and Brontios
Chapter Fourteen: A Rival to the Gods
Chapter Fifteen: The Quieting of the Gods
Afterword
Acknowledgments
About the Author
Moses is a fine writer deserving of success and I think that it will follow. I really enjoyed Moses’s work.
—NY Times Bestseller David Farland
The Black God’s War is, to date, the finest example of quality independent fantasy I’ve seen … This is what indie publishing is all about and I have no qualms about recommending this great novel.
—Indie Fantasy Review
I don’t give many 5 star reviews … I find I really can’t stop thinking about this story. Unforgettable story, intriguing characters, compelling journey with unexpected twists—in short, a very satisfying and engaging read.
—(5/5 stars) MotherLode Review Blog
… a rather brilliant climax that left me grinning from ear to ear …By the time you flip to the last few pages, I hope you have the shivers just as I did …
—Journal of Always Reviews
An inventive tale with high command of craft.
—Scott Nicholson, Author of The Red Church
Given the quality of the writing, you would not know that this is Siregar’s first novel and he set the bar quite high … I enjoyed this book, immensely. It had style, it had substance, and it had a lot of heart … Siregar easily defies the stigma that you can only get a quality book out of a recognised publishing house.
(Review: 9.4/10)
—FantasyBookReview.co.uk
Simply a great book, skillfully written. It is intriguing, holds your interest and has some surprising twists and turns that will pleasantly, or unpleasantly, surprise you. For a debut novel ... simply outstanding.
—Ray Nicholson (Top 1000 Amazon Reviewer)
I enjoyed [the] novella from its opening chapter to its gripping end.
(Review: 5 out of 5 stars)
—Red Adept Reviews
If you want to read a talented new author with a flair for storytelling, you should definitely pick up this story.
—Two Ends of the Pen Blog
Siregar's debut is an excellent example of the quality the indie author scene is capable of ... More like this, please.
—Signal dot Noise Blog
His characters are as passionate as his descriptive prose. The pacing is perfect ... This is a novella epic fantasy fans don't want to miss.
—Bryan Thomas Schmidt's Blog
The writing is tight, the characters well-drawn and deep, and the world feels alive and many-layered … this is no one- or two-dimensional and predictable plot/conflict, but rife with undercurrents and tensions that just spread out like so many strands of a spider’s web.
—W. Brondtkamffer’s Blog
Siregar's strongest suit may be the character development on display, as the royal siblings and a few other characters exude their personalities and frailties in a believable fashion.
—Skull Salad Reviews
… A tale spun with a degree of elegance I did not fully expect. The Black God’s War is a great example of how there are extremely talented indies.
—Ron C. Nieto’s Stories of my Life Blog
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The Black God’s War
[A Stand-Alone Novel]
(Splendor and Ruin, Book I)
The Black God’s War won awards in the categories of
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Author’s Note
This novella is a 27,000-word excerpt from my novel with the same title, The Black God’s War. The first five chapters of this novella are identical to the first five chapters of the full novel. After chapter five, this novella takes a different course in order to focus on particular characters and elements in the story. In brief, the novella focuses on the kingdom of Rezzia. The full novel shows both sides of the story, including Rezzia’s enemy, Pawelon.
If you like what you’ve read after five chapters, you could pick up the novel to read the rest of the 85-chapter story (120,000 words); that’s what I would recommend. Or, of course, you can just enjoy this shorter work (15 chapters).
Thanks for reading a new author. I hope you’ll enjoy the story!
"Every old poem is sacred."
-Horace
Chapter One: Sing Muse, of Hades and Light
IN THE KINGDOM OF REZZIA, inside the highest chamber of the grand minaret, ten-year-old Lucia looked out to see her father, King Vieri, on the balcony. He lifted her newborn brother high above his head, and the masses, hundreds of feet below, roared with devotion.
Father, what are you doing! she thought. Be more careful with our savior.
Lucia glanced down at her mother resting in the birthing pool. The queen’s black hair clung to her neck, all of it soaked by the holy waters.
You did it, Mother!
Kindness brightened her mother’s face. Thank the gods, dear. You have a brother now. A very special brother. Go, join your father and wave to the crowd.
You stay here and rest. I’ll wave to them on your behalf.
Her mother laughed. Thank you, Lucia. That sounds perfect.
Lucia crept toward the archway leading to the balcony wrapped around the circular chamber. She squinted, fighting the midday sun. Tears soaked her father’s cheeks as he presented the pink baby to the faithful. Nature had tattooed thorny red and black vines on little Caio’s hands and forearms: the holy markings of the Haizzem.
As she gazed at Caio, a spiritual energy filled her body with peace and warmth. Her spirit soared. The teachings are coming true! A Haizzem had come again, to rescue all the world. Her brother would conquer Rezzia’s foes and bring the gods’ light to everyone.
Lucia skipped forward to participate in the royal scene. She looked down at tens of thousands of pilgrims in their cream robes and felt dizzy. The clay-white acropolis of the holy city sprawled across the desert plateau: massive domed structures, spiraling minarets, and temples of the ten gods supported by grand columns.
She clutched her father’s ceremonial cremos robe to steady herself. The fabric was bloodied; he had obeyed the scriptural commandment for Rezzia’s king to oversee the birth of his own Haizzem son. She felt so lucky, knowing every Rezzian alive would love to be in her place, touching the king’s garments and the words of divine power stitched into them.
Her father pressed the baby against his chest, and pushed Lucia backward with his free hand. He raised up baby Caio and beamed his joy again.
The rejection shattered Lucia’s bliss.
Her father’s face, with his heavy brown eyes and his perfectly trimmed beard, always showed his serious nature. But as he admired the baby—so high above the masses—he transformed, positively euphoric. He looked at Caio with such true love, a look Lucia had never, ever seen before.
Lucia’s vision darted from her father to her brother and back again. Your love for me is a lie. She dropped her head and long vermilion hair fell around her face. She wouldn’t cry. Not then. Not in front of him.
The crowd’s chanting grew louder and louder. They cried out in
Recensioni
The book is very well written and the characters come to life after a somewhat slow start. Dialogue is smooth and easy. It rarely feels as though it's for the sole purpose of exposition, save for one section where one character reveals information about another character's past. The monologue feels as though it was lifted from something more modern and urban than this story's setting and it feels as if a completely different character is speaking.
Beyond that minor lapse in style, the book forms a very cohesive whole until the end. There, the resolution feels a little contrived, as if Siregar realized the book was running too long and wanted to wrap things up. Regardless, I look forward to Book II.
Plain speaking, I can't stand female characters who are too stupid to live especially in a book with a lot of words in it. Halfway through the book I was asking myself whether it was the character developments or plot progression but despite some promising start, as I go on, I don't find myself invested at all. Its not about likable characters or ELI5 plot but there's a need to add more complexities to make a fantasy book rich in content and soulful. Add to the fact that it does get tiring when the descriptive parts tend to be uneven and bland and sometimes appropriated to fit into the desired conflicts that drive the whole book. Usually I like politics in fictions but when clarity was rendered optional and the narrative style made character motivations genuinely nonsensical and again with the blown up writing style, do understand why it was so easy to give up on reading the book in the first place.
I don't feel the book was meant for me. Some may like it but overall, it was plain disappointment to me. Being Asian, I do love asian history and there's a whole field of unexplored territory of asian fantasy anyone could exploit with some imagination. Although I don't feel the book appropriated anything and the setting does remind me of Devdas, but I wish there was more to it than the setting being used as plot devices.
The ARC was given by the publisher in exchange for an honest review.
This particular selection of chapters centers around a brother-sister pair who are the leaders of a country and have been endowed with powers by their patron gods. Their country is involved in a holy war against another country (of non-believers, of course). The parallels between these gods and Greco-Roman mythology was a bit fun and I liked the involvement of the gods in the story.
It was decent, but I just couldn't really bring myself to get very invested in the characters. It just feels like something is missing. Ideas are OK, writing is decent, and I have read reviews that it got better, but I just have other things I would rather read.
Faith and Spirituality is a character in this story, as much as Caio, Rao and Lucia. One side, (the Rezzian) has a much more personal interaction with their pantheon of Gods; there's a lyrical scene where Caio ceremonially chooses, or is chosen by, his patron god. In contrast, the Pawelons – a primarily non-theist nation - give lip service to the concept of personal responsibility and profess disbelief in a more personal type of mystical worship of Gods, and yet, they also display an incredibly strong “faith” in the abilities they develop through meditation. It's an adept and respectful handling of spiritual variance, and I appreciated that.
I loved the character of Lucia. She's strong, smart and interesting. As a female long-time reader of Science Fiction and Fantasy, I think I've read every permutation of overwrought, emotional and incompetent female character a man can write. Lucia is anything but incompetent, and even better, she is still emotional, but contextually so. She's passionate, a leader, and her actions have reasons. It's beautiful. She's not a stock male character rewritten to be a woman, she's the kind of intentional woman character that makes you believe that the writer is surrounded by strong, capable, intelligent women, and has taken the time to listen and learn what strengths, motivations, and ideas these qualities drop in his lap for the content of his story. I found this to be the best piece of Black God's War.
I'm torn by whether or not I wanted more fleshing out of the Gods. On the one hand, I think it's an important idea that we are driven by our own desires far more than the desires of our Deities. King Vieri wants to conquer, and he will do anything to accomplish that, even if it places him in direct conflict with the goals of his Gods. The ease at which he drowns out their direction rings true throughout the story. On the other hand, you have a Pantheon of higher beings that work as a single unit, each reflective of a different concept, with different supernatural abilities, which they can confer on their devotees. There are glimpses of a much larger story here. Why are these Beings so interested in this one protracted war? Why are they seemingly unconcerned with a whole nation that denies their existence? Why are they so incredibly powerful in battle, but with the exception of Danato, apparently so unable to directly influence any of their own people? I wanted to know this story.
That brings me to my only real complaint about the telling of this story. Even though I personally love a “wordy” story, I can't even count the number of epic-style fantasy stories I've read that were horrendously overwritten (*ahem* Jordan *cough*) sometime to the degree that I couldn't finish. Still, there is something to be said for the kind of writing that envelopes you in a world, and builds a universe in the mind. I want to feel the heat of the sand coming up through my sandals, and smell the stone and earth. I wish to see the citadel and hear the tent fabric flapping when the breeze comes up. I need to know about the sweat running down his back as he's locked in mortal combat, and the fear in his eyes, and the feel of the horses gathering up their muscles for the gods-powered burst of battle speed.
This story provides some of that, the combat scenes have a life of their own, but many of the other parts of the story feel like they were edited too closely. The soul of the story – the personal conflicts and relationships – were somewhat constrained, and left me wanting more development. Draw me a picture, I want to see it all. Maybe that's really too picky for a debut novel. Maybe I'm criticizing because I liked it so much. Maybe it just didn't otherwise feel like a debut. And yet, it's not a short novel, nearly 400 pages in the print edition, and I've started to really sour on the 700 page epic series debut. So maybe this accomplishes what a first in series should do – give me a story and a tease. It certainly does that, and whatever/whenever Splendor and Ruin, Book 2 exists, you can be sure I will be reading it.